um. two paragraphs i wrote o-o.

by **phantasm** Sun 02 Aug 2009, 22:44

hmm, two paragraphs/chapters for a story i randomly thought up.

Jen tried with the last of her strength to cling to the metal bar, swaying below the rafters above. It was the only thing keeping her from falling into the dark, menacing pool of deadly chemicals. The smell was intoxicating her, and her bruised and cut arms couldn’t hold on any longer. She felt the strength slipping away from her, and her fingers sliding down the rusty pipe. She felt her hand leave the bar. She felt herself splash into the grasp of the dark fluids, and she embraced it. Anything was better then what she’d been through, even death. She slowly closed her eyes, although she didn’t feel herself being dragged out of the water by an elderly man in black, as she was already unconscious. The man pulled the fourteen-year-old girl over his should with seemingly no effort, and walked out of the factory and into his black jaguar. Its tinted, black windows helped keep his, and everyone else that accompanied him, identity secret. And if someone should know who he really was, they would have to have an ‘accident’; for a good cause, of course.

The white hospital bed felt uncomfortable under Brett. He just wanted to go back home, he didn’t know why he had to be kept in this hospital for so long. All he did was break his arm, and a couple fingers, skateboarding. Big deal. It happened all the time, he was a dare devil. His arm was feeling better anyway. It was only a hairline fracture, for God’s sake- His thought was interrupted by his door being slammed open, as large men in black rushed through towards Brett. He was too shocked to do anything as they stuck him with a needle. He was unconscious in under a minute, and the men took his body out to a black jaguar parked outside the hospital. The car quickly drove away, fading in the night sky.

kind of mysterious, oohh. so i'm gonna start writing a story for that.
comments?